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1^st problem: Congress needs to stimulate the Education system. Solutions: give more supporting devices for school, improve the teachers’ knowledge

• disadvantages: Does stimulate the education system and the economy decresing related to each other?  

2^nd problem: Immigration is very necessary too(too? u mean to?) develop a country economy. Solutions: give more opportunities for high-educated immigrations, help the international students who want to have higher education in the U.S.

• advantages: U.S government is now earning lots of money from immigrants. Therefore, this could be valid idea to earn lots of money. disadvantages: can you be specific why immigration is very necessary to develop economy? how can U.S. help the international students to immigrant? Does U.S. have to offer something? And right now, U.S. citizens disagree with too many immigrants in U.S., how are you going to take care of the anti-immigrants?

3^rdproblem: we need to balance the fund for was(u mean wars?) and warfare. Solutions: reduce the money for foreign wars, don’t need to spend more money into developing atom weapons

•  advantages: I storongly agree with your idea! I think U.S. should stop using money for war because U.S. does not have enough money to fund for wars and warfare. disadvantages: but if there is an attack from other country, then what should U.S. govenment do if there are no prepared weapons.

• Positive point of the outline: reduced the amount of money that U.S. government funds for wars and warfare. U.S. is now using too much money for wars’ weapons. Second, it is also valid idea to earn money from immigration since now U.S. government is earning lots of money from immigration.
• suggestion to improve the outline: be more specific on your strong points. And be sure to remove the idea of the education system. There are lots of disagreed opinions towards the education system that people can make.

tmtredneck:

Since the beginning of the 21^st century, all the economies from all over the world, which is including the U.S., has been drecrising. Therefore the U.S. government has been trying to improve the country economy system. They have been giving out millions of dollards to fix the situation, but beside the aids, the government also needs to realize some main problems that have contributing into crisis.

1^st problem: Congress needs to stimulate the Education system.

<!—[if !supportLists]—>-          <!—[endif]—>Solutions : give more supporting devices for school, improve the teachers’ knowledge

2^nd problem: Immigration is very necessary too(too? u mean to?) develop a country economy.

<!—[if !supportLists]—>-          <!—[endif]—>Solutions: give more opportunities for high-educated immigrations, help the international students who want to have higher education in the U.S.

3^rd problem: we need to balance the fund for was(u mean wars?) and warfare.

<!—[if !supportLists]—>-          <!—[endif]—>Solutions: reduce the money for foreign wars, don’t need to spend more money into developing atom weapons